Chapter 2: Evidence

Watch This!

Now that you have completed the process and drafted a blueprint and opening for this essay, watch Video 2.3: Analysis of Article and Constructing the Two-Storey Opening to see what we came up with. It is important to remember that your interpretation of the text does not have to be the same as ours. There is no right or wrong interpretation of a text when that interpretation is supported by evidence from the text. Consider the argument we make in our close reading, but pay more attention to the work we put in to get to that interpretation. While your focus and claim need not be the same as ours, it should have the same level of support.

Interesting words or phrases


public sacrifice


create and submit to government

conducive place


“fair trade”

public goods

environmental pollution control

erosion of public transit

gathering spaces

New words or phrases






wage earners



political consumerism

Synonyms and Related Terms


Save the planet: walkable, car-free, green homes, biodiversity

Young People: pre-political, high school students, kids

Responsibility: taxes, public sacrifice, or the restraint of private choice

Making tomorrow, today!: community visioning and master planning, ambitions, desired future, young people engage

Cogs: clients and consumers, wage earners, property owners, taxpayers, and voters,

Power: submit to government; coerce; government regulation, bloated bureaucracy, or an oppressive “nanny state;” rarely truly accessible to all

Swedish Students’ Concerns: insufficient government action, inadequate protection or provision of public goods and services, decline in green spaces, loss or erosion of public transit, lack of bicycle paths or gathering spaces

American Students Concerns: inadequate provision of public goods, more public transportation or an improved public skate park, undesirable side effects of business, too many chain stores, construction leading to displacement of wildlife and natural areas, government actions, lack of business or types of business

Lowered Expectations?: hesitant, expect; perceived capacity; privatization or charging fees for what were once public services is common everywhere from parks to police protection; an ideology of limited expectations from government



public or social v. private goods

Stockholm, Sweden v. Keene, New Hampshire

adults v. high school students

“malls and amusement parks” v. “clean waterways, street art, and public transit”

Stockholm students’ vision v. Keene students’ vision

active citizenship v. “something to do”

private realm v. public realm

lack of imagination v. challenging the perceived status quo

consumerism v. civil disobedience?

Observational Paragraph

We have chosen as our two best observations the contrast of “Stockholm students’ vision v. Keene students’ vision”  and the list of synonyms titled “Lowered Expectations?” (It is again worth noting that the choice of these two observations as the “best” does not mean we throw away or ignore the remaining observations. Rather, we use the selected observations as a lens through which we can view, select, and organize the remaining information into our most interesting and persuasive analytical reading.)

Two-Storey Opening

In “Kids Around the World Just Want to Hang Out” Michael Welsh compares the responses given by two separate groups of high school students from Stockholm, Sweden and Keene, New Hampshire who were surveyed about “their preferences and visions for their cities.” Welsh uses this comparison to convey a distressing reality he hopes his American readers will be motivated to address: while both groups of students seemed to have the same hopes and visions for a greener, cleaner future for their cities, the students of Keene displayed considerably less vision than their Stockholm counterparts, “limited expectations” of their government’s ability or interested to help them attain their goals, and a worrying reliance on commercial companies to provide them the accessible, common, and entertaining spaces they desire.



Point One: Analyze the similar desires Welsh identifies within the responses of both groups of students making note of how the only difference seems to be the Keene students’ “lack of vision.”

Point Two: Analyze how Welsh seems to point to the influence of commercialism on these students as not only a possible source of this “lack of vision” but also a source of inspiration and salvation for these hopeful but surprisingly uninspired students.

Point Three: Analyze how Welsh subtly insinuates the dangerous difference between a public commons and a corporate sponsored commons

Point Four: Analyze how Welsh discusses what is really at stake here and what is really lost. Free thought and innovation are fostered in free and open common spaces. What will happen to the future if these spaces are no longer “free” but sponsored by corporations with their own desires and agendas?


Icon for the Creative Commons Attribution 4.0 International License

Write Here, Right Now: An Interactive Introduction to Academic Writing and Research Copyright © 2018 by Ryerson University is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution 4.0 International License, except where otherwise noted.